a crow
in the rain washed sky
silver clouds

silver clouds
in the rain washed sky
a crow

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Professor Takao Sasaki helped me edit my Japanese version. It’s now a 5-7-5. Here is the changed version.

からす飛ぶ
雨洗う空　
銀の雲　

karasu tobu (5) 
ame arau sora (7) 
gin no kumo (5)

Note that n or ん is a full syllable in Japanese. gi-n-no-ku-mo (5). On the other hand, in the English language, the word gin is single syllable. In Japanese, gin = gi – n consists of 2 syllables.